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Ch. 23 off to the betas

I hope you all have read bistyboo1974's latest chapter at her muggleglum archive! It was lovely. *sigh*

Anyway, it's done. And kind of short. About 1500 words. But some things I had originally planned to put in this one just didn't feel right here. So I'm saving them for the next chapter and following.

Here's a tease:

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Lois didn’t know how long she stood there, observing him through the wide windows. Richard sat in profile to her, glancing frequently down the street toward the Daily Planet building. She had parked on the other side of the Starbucks, hoping to get here ahead of Richard, but she had failed. There had been traffic, and she supposed she could have used the ‘Superman Express’ – but she didn’t really feel right doing that… And so now she stood just outside, her feet frozen to the sidewalk…

Come on, Lane, you can do it, she encouraged herself, although she wasn’t completely sure that she could do it. Maybe we could just disappear – who needs passports and papers when you can fly? Jason would enjoy seeing the world…

It was a measure of her nervousness that she was actually having these thoughts at all. Just because she was known as fearless didn’t mean that she didn’t feel fear. She usually ignored it because her insatiable curiosity and need to get the story had always been far stronger.



Richard glanced at his watch, checking for the umpteenth time. It was probably only a few minutes past the time when she said she would meet him, but he had been checking it since she had been standing there… Finally, he glanced in her direction, and she started guiltily. That small movement got her feet going, though. She pushed through the doors with a fresh sense of determination.



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ETA: I guess this was all messed up... here's another try!

Comments

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ancarett
Sep. 10th, 2006 10:42 am (UTC)
Poor Lois: frozen with fear and contemplating running off! This will be tough for her (almost as tough as it was to write, I imagine). Looking forward to the full chapter post!
htbthomas
Sep. 10th, 2006 12:42 pm (UTC)
It was tough to write mostly in that I kept second-guessing what I would and would not use in this one, as opposed to putting it in the next.

I also hope I struck the right balance of emotions in Lois and Richard. *bites nails* It's my turn to worry...
bistyboo1974
Sep. 10th, 2006 12:47 pm (UTC)
Oh, I'm rubbing off on you. And not in the good way. *offers hugs*

In the immortal words of Bobby McFerrin: "Don't worry, be happy."

;-)
ancarett
Sep. 10th, 2006 01:23 pm (UTC)
Oh, goodness! Don't be worried, please! I'm sure that the balance will be kept -- being aware of the possible pitfalls is half the battle.
bistyboo1974
Sep. 10th, 2006 12:38 pm (UTC)
God, Lois and Richard have a tough conversation ahead of them.

*orders a frappuccino and sits down at the table behind them to eavesdrop*

Short chapter or not, I'm quite anxious to read it!
htbthomas
Sep. 10th, 2006 12:41 pm (UTC)
I'm half-tempted to write you into the scene... there's a spot it would go perfectly.:)
bistyboo1974
Sep. 10th, 2006 12:44 pm (UTC)
*giggles*

I'm dying of happiness at the mere idea of being worthy of a cameo!! :-D
htbthomas
Sep. 10th, 2006 06:51 pm (UTC)
I started to put this in, and then I thought - what description do you want? Just one item is fine (an article of clothing, an accessory, hair color...)
bistyboo1974
Sep. 10th, 2006 07:11 pm (UTC)
Oh, definitely hair (unless it's too late now). My hair is the darkest of browns...just a shade off black, as the kids at school say. ;-)
elliania
Sep. 10th, 2006 05:50 pm (UTC)
Oh no! No! I want more!!!!!!!!!!

This was a really good tease! Maybe too much! Please, don't let us wait any longer!!
htbthomas
Sep. 10th, 2006 06:01 pm (UTC)
I would love to have this for you... but I am still waiting on my final beta revision. Two of the three are in. But I want to hold out a bit longer for the last one. I really hope it will be ready by this evening.

Thanks!
elliania
Sep. 10th, 2006 06:04 pm (UTC)
I know you doing your best! ;-) It's just, it's not everyday we can read a Lois/Richard conversation!!! :DDDD
therealmarajade
Sep. 10th, 2006 05:56 pm (UTC)
Can't wait for the chapter! ;)
htbthomas
Sep. 10th, 2006 06:02 pm (UTC)
I hope you can wait a little while longer... it should be this evening at the latest. :)
marwen17
Sep. 10th, 2006 07:47 pm (UTC)
You little... TEASE!

I can't wait anymore... you're going to make me cry.
htbthomas
Sep. 10th, 2006 08:47 pm (UTC)
I would have already posted it this morning, except I am impatiently waiting... I wonder if she's really busy today?
alamo_girl80
Sep. 11th, 2006 03:06 pm (UTC)
The "Superman Express!" HA! I love it! Riding the 'S' train, baby! *snicker*

I love your teases. I wish I had my stuff planned out that far to even put teases up. But, Mel is a dork. With Scofield on the brain.

And she usually has only a rough idea where her chappies are going before she types. *sigh* Off to the plot-rock quarry I go...
htbthomas
Sep. 11th, 2006 04:13 pm (UTC)
Well, I only do the teases after I have written a page or two. Especially when I need a little feedback break. Or, like this time, I waited until I sent it to my beta team. You know, after you write, you could always post your tease, THEN send it to me...

But you aren't publishing Veritas here, so I'm not sure how that would work. *shrugs*
alamo_girl80
Sep. 11th, 2006 05:27 pm (UTC)
Well, the only reason I don't post on LJ for my fic, is because I don't have that many readers who would read it here too. Unlike Bitsy, *hee!* Most of my readers are on FF.net.

But putting teasers up here is a good idea. Hmm. I'm in the middle of ch 9 now, working on Margaret in Greenland...

Maybe I'll come up with something before I get this chappie to you. *goes to stock up on caffiene to stay awake from being sick all night*
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