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...or another chapter of Déjà Vu has been written and sent off to the betas! Whichever.

I hope that sean_montgomery and bistyboo1974 have better luck with their Muses the rest of this weekend! Mine never really lets me alone in the middle of a story...


As he opened the door, she could see into the room beyond. The living area was tastefully furnished with a set of dark leather armchairs and matching sofa. Placing a hand on her upper arm, he steered her into the cottage. On the rustic wooden coffee table, Lois could see two wineglasses – one empty, one half-full – and a few used dinner dishes. There was even a smaller plate laying on the floor beside the table, a mess of half-eaten food still on it.

Mitchener stopped short again. The puzzled frown he had been sporting outside the cabin came back full force, even deeper than before. Does he have guests? Is he bringing me… to someone? She shivered.

He broke himself from his trance. “This way, Ms. Lane,” he requested, urging her ahead of him toward the back of the cabin. She craned her head around as quickly as possible trying to take a mental photograph of her surroundings… Plush floor rugs, expensive-looking art, a well-appointed kitchen… but she had little time to see anything else as she was urged into a long hallway which seemed to lead back to the master bedroom.

With a more and more anxious feeling, Lois found herself at the dead end of the hallway, facing a large, heavy-looking metal door. To the right side was a small keypad – some sort of entry code must be required. Are Mitchener’s guests behind that door? she thought worriedly. She could hear some sort of sound coming through, but she couldn’t quite make out what it was...



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Nov. 19th, 2006 01:53 am (UTC)
squee for the writing progress.

sympathies for the child not staying in bed.
Nov. 19th, 2006 02:57 am (UTC)
Thanks for both of your thoughts. And as for the little one - it's 10pm now, and she's STILL not sleeping. Grr. Oh well.
Nov. 19th, 2006 02:00 am (UTC)
More teasers! Barb, you're driving me CRAZY! : )

The muse is still a-ticken, but she's being a little onry right now. She doesn't want to think about Richard as much as I'm making her (not yet, anyway). Any advice?
Nov. 19th, 2006 03:04 am (UTC)
Are you saying that Lois doesn't want to think about Richard? I guess, as a married woman, I would have her wonder these sorts of things (even if she already has - the thoughts would probably make a mental loop):

Where is he?
Is he safe?
What was he getting into?
Why didn't he tell me about it? (With the added bonus of: How honest are you with him - ex: Jason's father...)
Could I possibly ask Superman for help without seeming like a total slut?
Are they going after Richard to get to me or my son?

These are just a few things. Plus she should probably see things around the house that remind her of him, and cause a wave of panic or sadness, a clenching of her gut... and if she does this around Clark - what delicious angst!

Does that help?
Nov. 19th, 2006 03:32 am (UTC)
Heh, sorry! I was talking about the muse - the MUSE doesn't want to be thinking about Richard. But Lois sure should. I'm going over chapters seven and eight right now and am giving Lois more misery moments, which will eventually lead up to Clark getting information out of her (why she went, how did she know where to go, etc.) Some house items will come into play. I just need to focus on the emotional reeling than the mystery itself (for the moment).

Your ideas are noted - thank you for them! They do help, but the biggest thing right now is making sure all of this dialogue and stuff makes sense. To be honest, I think I might have to cut chapter eight into two parts and make Richard's debut chapter ten instead of nine!

Oops, saying too much already. ;)
Nov. 19th, 2006 03:18 am (UTC)
Hmm, wine glasses??

Intriguing teasers, this one and the previous...can't wait for the real deal. ;-)

*sprinkles magic sleeping dust over Ashlyn*
Nov. 19th, 2006 06:24 pm (UTC)
Yes... wineglasses... *cue spooky music*

Ashlyn finally went to sleep. But AFTER I did. Luckily she just stayed in her room, watching a video. Sigh. Girl just doesn't need as much sleep as her mama!
Nov. 19th, 2006 01:52 pm (UTC)
This so reminds me of a poem/story that was told to my class in elementary school around Halloween about a house, and inside the house was a bedroom, and inside the bedroom was a closet, a shelf, a box, a bag, etc...and it was spoken in a slow and creepy tone of voice so that each revelation made it scarier and yet more intriguing.

Of course, my friends and I retold that story at home, and because we were in silly moods, one friend waited until we were right at that crucial point near the end of the story - "and inside the box..." - to yell out cheerily, "A bag of jellybeans!" *laughs* STILL cracks me up.

So, somewhere, in the mountains, Lois is entering a cabin, and in the cabin is some mysterious clues, and beyond the clues is a keypad to a door, and beyond the door is...

Here's to hoping it's not just a bag of jellybeans. :D *cheers*

Thanks for the teasers! Can't wait for the whole thing!! *huggles*
Nov. 19th, 2006 01:53 pm (UTC)
That was supposed to read, "And inside the box, there was a bag of jellybeans." Duh.
Nov. 19th, 2006 06:28 pm (UTC)
"And inside the box was..."

Well, you'll just have to see. Because there truly is something inside the box!!! Bwahahahahaha.

It's DEFINITELY not jellybeans. I promise. :)
Nov. 19th, 2006 02:58 pm (UTC)
Menace factor gets amped up in this second teaser. Lois seems to be in deep trouble and now she too has the feeling that someone else was in the cabin before their arrival. Who could it be? Someone sinister, probably.

Nice job, Barbara.
Nov. 19th, 2006 06:29 pm (UTC)
Someone sinister, you say? Of course, you wrote this post-beta... ;) Lucky person with the inside info. Thanks for getting it back to me quickly! *kiss*
Nov. 19th, 2006 06:34 pm (UTC)
Well, what can I say? A little inside info works in a pinch. As always, you are welcome. *kiss*
Nov. 19th, 2006 10:50 pm (UTC)
If you're trying to drive me crazy... it's working.

*bangs head repeatedly against the wall*

Damn it! Is he who I think he is?
Nov. 20th, 2006 01:08 am (UTC)
Um, he just may be who you think it is... and I am posting Ch. 32 right now!

See you soon!
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