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Déjà Vu

Chapter 40: Together

Lois Lane set foot cautiously outside the elevator doors, letting the river of people exiting at the same time swirl around her and drift off their separate ways. She stood for a few moments in the vestibule, not quite ready to go to her desk. The main reason? She had to try to control the silly grin she could not quite wipe from her face.

In the elevator, with everyone’s nose either buried in the morning edition, or minds elsewhere, she felt free to stand in the back and watch the numbers on the display go ever higher with a besotted smile on her face. All the while she was feeling that something profound had changed in her life, that she had experienced a kind of paradigm shift which she could never explain to anyone. Well, not anyone except for her hu— her husband. A tiny thrill shot through her at the thought, and she fondly touched the wedding band hanging from a long, slender gold chain around her neck. She would wear it there, hidden below the neckline of her blouse, close to her heart, until it was appropriate to let everyone know how she felt about a certain Mr. Clark Kent.

At last, Lois took a deep breath, squared her shoulders, fixed a blank expression on her face, and took a step into the war room…

“Hey, Miss Lane!” Jimmy called out with a cheerful wave the second she came into view.

Lois smiled slightly in greeting. “Hi, Jimmy.” Nodding, she continued briskly toward her desk, but Jimmy trailed behind her like an eager toddler.

Upon reaching her desk, she lifted up a copy of the morning edition. “It’s all over the news this morning… on a virtual loop,” Jimmy commented, pointing at the headline. In bold 72-point type across the top it read, Deputy Mayor Implicated in City-Wide Construction Scandal. In smaller type, there was a sub-headline: Lex Luthor Silent Partner in Scam! A photo of a haggard-looking Mitchener, taken right after his capture by police, was juxtaposed beside one of Luthor taken after his parole hearing, smiling smugly into the camera. Jimmy continued, pointing up at the television monitors above them, “I’m surprised they don’t have you on one of those morning shows right now. I bet they were practically foaming at the mouth to interview you after your kidnapping and rescue…”

Lois glanced up as well. The news crawl at the bottom of the screen focused on the scandal and the talking heads were buzzing non-stop on the city’s morning show. “Damn sharks.” She looked down at her desk phone, which was frantically flashing the message waiting light. “Let them have their feeding frenzy. I’m not going to toss them any meat.” Inwardly, Lois cringed. She had deliberately left her cell phone off all weekend long while they stayed at the Fortress, since there wasn’t any reception up there, and her head had been so far in the clouds this morning, that she’d completely forgotten to turn it back on…

“Yeah, well, you guys sure nailed this one. Lane and Kent, in the groove again! By the way…” Jimmy added. “Where is Mr. Kent this morning?” He raised an eyebrow to punctuate his meaning, grinning widely.

She raised her eyebrow at him in return, surreptitiously fingering the ring beneath her blouse as she answered smoothly, “Just running a few errands before work. He’ll be in later.”

Jimmy waited expectantly for more information. Lois purposely let the moment run an awkward beat too long, holding his gaze with her own until he shrugged guiltily and dropped his eyes. “Well, I just wanted to congratulate you both on the story.”

“Thanks, Jimmy, I’ll pass that on to him.” Despite the front she was trying to put up, Jimmy’s enthusiasm about his co-workers’ new relationship was infectious. She found she was smiling despite herself. It was nice to have a friend in their corner.

“It’s been just like old times around here, hasn’t it?” he commented wistfully.

“Yeah,” she agreed. Just like old times, when Clark and I would run down a story until late at night… and then I would talk with his alter-ego until dawn… She chuckled softly at the irony once again. “It is like…” A movement to the left caught her eye – Richard standing in his office to get a book from the shelf. As he moved, something about his appearance conveyed an air of quiet desolation. “…old times…”

Jimmy followed her gaze to Richard’s office. “Um, I’d better get back to work.” He awkwardly patted her arm as he snuck away. “Great job.”

But she hardly registered any of that, for at the same moment, Richard caught her eyes and held them. He looked so tired, so sad… At that moment, she knew she had to speak to him, to keep their relationship somewhat friendly. And there was no better time than the present.

She walked over to his office as he sat down, tapping lightly on the doorframe. “Richard?”

“Morning, Lois.” He sighed before continuing, “When you didn’t come back to the house all weekend I wondered if you’d even make it to work today.”

She grimaced. “Sorry, we were pretty busy up North.” She flushed a little, a flash of skin on skin overtaking her memories for a moment, and she lightly brushed the band nestled between her breasts again. “Clark did stop by for some clothes… but…” She looked away, embarrassed. “Anyway, I wanted to tell you that I’ll be looking for a new place to live this week. I hope I can get my stuff out of there in the next few days. You know, my clothes, personal mementos…”

“Lois, you know you don’t have to do that,” he said quietly, eyes sad. “We’re all adults, and there is a spare bedroom. Plus, Jason…”

“I know, but I…” I want to spend as much time with my secret husband as possible, even if he has to pretend to be nothing more than a co-worker by day and a phantom in my bed at night. “I just think it would be easier on all of us if I moved out as soon as possible.”

Richard pressed his lips together. “All right. Whatever you need to do.” He turned his chair back to his computer monitor. “Now if you’ll excuse me, I—” Richard stopped mid-word, looking out into the busy newsroom.

Lois turned to see Clark walking into the room, clumsily making his way to his desk, knickknacks toppling, annoyed looks flying. Involuntarily, her hand leapt to her necklace again, and her heart fluttered wildly at the sight. He turned toward her at that moment, raising a hand in greeting, and she waved back, eyes too bright. Biting her lip and closing her eyes, she turned around before she gave herself away to the rest of the office.

“That’s it, right there,” Richard said hoarsely, startling her from her flustered attempt to get under control again.

“What?” she asked, flushing slightly.

“That look, that smile… oh, God, I would have given anything for you to have looked at me that way… even once.” The raw emotion in her ex-fiancé’s eyes almost made her take a step backward.

“Richard, I…”

“No, don’t try to explain, Lois.” Richard stood and took a few steps toward her until he was on her side of the desk. “I waited… and hoped…” He gently took one of her hands. “And proposed to you, even, hoping to strengthen the bond between us.” He lifted his other hand to lightly trace the edge of her cheek. “But that one thing, that look. It was never there. Nothing I could say or do would bring it to your face.”

And before she could even react, he had quickly snagged the edge of her necklace and pulled it from her blouse into the light. Shocked at what he saw dangling from the chain, Richard did take a step back, dropping the ring back to her chest as though it were a hot coal. Lois quickly covered it with her palm and slipped it inside her neckline again, a little stunned at such an intimate invasion of her privacy.

“I… I don’t know what I expected to find there… but certainly not…” He ran a palm across his face in astonishment. “Not that.” He leaned heavily against the side of his desk, head lowered dejectedly.

Lois spoke quietly, feeling his heartbreak deeply. “I didn’t want you to find out this way…”

He looked back up, eyes red-rimmed and shiny. “But it’s true, isn’t it?”

All she could do was nod.

His voice broke. “I’ve really lost you forever, haven’t I? I mean, I knew that as soon as I saw you two together on the roof, but… I think it’s only just now sinking in.”

Lois reached a tentative hand toward his shoulder. “I’m sorry, Richard. We both are.”

Richard looked up, glancing at where Clark sat at his desk, regretful eyes on her ex-fiancé. Richard smiled sadly again, ironically. “I never really had you, though, did I?” He turned away before she could answer his rhetorical question, walking over to the window and looking out. “The two of you have this history – I won’t even pretend to understand it – and despite the fact that your mind blocked all of that trauma out, somewhere deep inside, you never stopped loving him. Even though he left, possibly never to return, some part of you must have kept holding on.” He never looked back at her as he continued in a shaking voice, “I won’t pretend to be happy about it… but it’s obvious to me you share a deep love that I had no hope of coming between. Your life with him was simply interrupted.” He took a deep breath to steady himself. “I hope you’ll finally be happy – it’s all I ever wanted for you, Lois.”

Lois searched for the right words to say, touched by Richard’s generosity and eloquence. She wanted to say something that wouldn’t be just empty sentiment, but nothing was coming to mind. “There’s someone out there, Richard. Someone who deserves you. You were there for me when he couldn’t be, and for that, I’ll always be grateful.” It was trite, but absolutely true… and it wasn’t enough. It would never be enough. Not until the right woman came along to heal the wounds she had so carelessly inflicted.

Richard looked back at her then, and gave her another heartbreaking smile. “I pray you’re right, Lois.” Then he went back to staring out of the window, lost in thought.

Lois quietly walked away, feeling the curious eyes of her co-workers on her. What had they been expecting? A fight? A tearful goodbye? In a sudden fit of pique, she glared around her, embarrassing most of them into returning to work.

But a few sets of eyes didn’t back away. Jimmy, looking sad but knowing, Perry, shaking his head in exasperated acceptance. And Clark, the only other person privy to that conversation, was giving her a look of commiseration. In a quiet voice, she asked him as she reached his desk, “Are the next few months going to be as hard as I think they are?”

He gave her a compassionate look. “Probably harder. But we’ll get through them. We have each other, now,” he answered, just as quietly. Picking up the front page with a shy grin, as if he were discussing the story with her, he went on. “With you, I’ll be able to do anything.”

She grinned back, blinking away a few late tears. “We’ll be unstoppable.” Her grin faded as her eyes fell again on the photos under the headline. Luthor seemed to sneer at her disdainfully, as if to say, Oh, yeah? What about me, you cocky bitch?

Clark saw what she had focused on, and his tone hardened with determination. “We’ll get him, too, Lois. I don’t care how many lead-lined, kryptonite-filled rooms he’s got across the face of the planet.” He took a risk in looking deeply into her eyes, and she shivered at the intensity she saw there. “We’ll catch him, and I’ll make sure he pays for everything he did – to me, to you, to our family, to the world.”

She stared back just as intensely. “I know you will.” Then in a very low voice she added, glancing behind her, “Now stop looking at me like that or we’ll blow our cover… because I’ll end up dragging your sexy bod by your ugly, old-fashioned tie into that closet over there.”

Surprised, Clark laughed boyishly, the tension broken. She gave him a little wink as she whacked him lightly on the arm with the newspaper she’d been holding. In a louder voice, for the benefit of the people at the desks around them, she asked, “So, Kent. Tell me more about those leads you turned up this weekend.”

“Oh, okay, Ms. Lane. Let me get the information out of my files…” he said with a touch of perfectly acted nervousness.

“Bring them over to my desk, okay?” She briskly walked back to her desk, murmuring very softly as she went, “And don’t keep your loving wife waiting.”

Lois sat at her desk with a second pleased grin beginning to form. Yes, things with Richard were going to be awkward for a while. Yes, it was going to be torture keeping her feelings for Clark under wraps. Yes, it was probably going to be difficult as he adjusted to life with a family, and she adjusted to his constant service to the world. But she didn’t care. Whatever it takes, we’ll deal with it. Our love has survived a memory wipe, an unexpected pregnancy and several brushes with death. We are stronger together than we ever were apart.

As she reorganized the clutter of papers in front of her and started to get ready for the day, her foot kicked her handbag, reminding her that she really should check the messages on her phone. Reaching inside, she turned on the device and placed it on her desk. By the time she had started up her computer, the phone’s LCD showed a large number of messages in her voice mail inbox. Lois groaned. Maybe I’ll wait just a little bit longer…

But as she held it up trying to muster up the courage to check the messages, the phone vibrated in her palm, ringing shrilly. She looked at the screen again: Unavailable No. “Well, I guess I have to start somewhere…” Punching the TALK button, she used her most impatient, business-like tone: “Lois Lane here.”

“Miss Lane. I’m glad to hear that you are alive and well.” She shivered as she recognized the cold voice. Lex Luthor.

“Luthor. How did you get this number, you bastard?” she asked venomously.

At that moment, Clark appeared by her desk, face full of worry. She pointed to her ear, and made a swooping motion, eyes wide. Can you hear where he is? Can you grab him?

Clark cocked his head to the side, frowning in concentration.

“Does it really matter, Miss Lane? And don’t bother getting your alien lover to trace the signal or the sound of my voice. By now, you should know that unlike some people I know, I learn from my mistakes.”

Clark shook his head at her, frowning even more deeply.

“What do you want, Luthor?” she grated out, gritting her teeth in frustration. Clark pulled a chair over to sit beside her, fists clenched.

“Oh, nothing much. I just wanted to remind you that your digging into my affairs could have some serious consequences for your family.” Her mind racing, Lois wondered if this was a declaration of vengeance, a warning, or both…

Beside her, Clark growled low in his throat, seeming to make a superhuman effort to keep himself just barely under control.

“Is that a threat?” Lois asked, voice ice-cold with anger. “Because you should know by now that I don’t respond well to threats.”

“Let’s not mince words. You know exactly what I mean by that – I won’t insult your intelligence by assuming otherwise. Just one more thing before I go…”

There was a pause, and Lois’ blood boiled as she began, “I don’t have to listen to—”

“You can pass this on to him as well… if he isn’t already listening. I wish the two of you the best of luck in your new life together.”

As Lois and Clark looked at each other in speechless horror, the line went dead.

THE END

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A/N: Yes, I know that was evil. Would you expect any less from the ECQ? I’m not planning an immediate sequel, but this leaves it open-ended enough that I can. Look for more 12days_of_clois one-shots, and if you are a fan of Monk or Spider-Man, then keep me on author alert!

A HUGE thank you to the DV Beta Team!
betty brant, mark_clark, jenna_knight, coltdancer and bistyboo1974


Lastly, please, please, please REVIEW! This is the last chapter, and if all of the people who have friended me because of this story review, I would be very pleased. *grin*

To make it easier, why don’t you answer one or all of these questions in your review?

1) What was the most memorable part of this story?
2) What surprised you the most?
3) What scenes would you like to have seen from a different character’s (other than Lois) point of view?

And be sure to check out my R-rated Valentine’s Day fic, Dinner Plans, especially if you like fun and frisky Lois and Clark. I love you all, and good night.

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mark_clark
Feb. 13th, 2007 12:36 am (UTC)
It was really nice to see how wonderful Lois felt on her first day back at the Planet. You just had to know that she was on cloud nine. That was a nice touch to have Lois wear her wedding ring around her neck since that is the only place she can keep it for the time being. But that makes me wonder where Clark is keeping his because he can't wear it as Clark or as Superman.

I really loved Jimmy here. You can always count on him to be his cheery self. If Jimmy knew that Lois and Clark were married, he'd be overjoyed for his two friends. Plus, leave it to him to show Lois the headline of the morning edition. So, Mitchener's misdeeds are now public knowledge as well as his alledged link to one Lex Luthor. But what I really liked was when Jimmy congratulated her and Clark with their story. It definitely was like old times.

Seeing Richard again was nice. With him here, we can finally see some closure with him and Lois. Too bad that he found Lois ring. His reaction was just as I expected it to be. It was good of Lois to explain that they didn't want him to find out that way and I think she did a great job getting that point across to him. Richard had hoped that he would be the one that could light up Lois like she is but he now realizes that Clark/Superman was the one for her. Richard will be hurting for a while and hopefully the right girl will come along and he can have the same type of relationship that Lois and Clark have.

When Clark finally arrived, they were able to act like there was nothing going on between them but I did enjoyed the hushed talking between them. It will be tough on them until they can make their relationship public but they will be able to handle it and other things together.

It was fitting to have Lex show up, even verbally in this final chapter. He sure is a cocky SOB for calling Lois and sounding grateful that she is alive and well. This showed how maniacal Lex is and you did a wonderful job showing that. You also showed how intelligent and resourceful he is as well, especially with his last comment to Lois. Now that really shocked Lois and Clark. That was a fantastic ending to a sensational story. Now, onto your questions.

1) The most memorable part of the story for me was when Lois and Clark got married in the Fortress while Jor-El and Lara presided over it. I think that meant a lot to Clark to have his birth parents able to see him get married to the woman he loves.

2) The wedding at the Fortress was a surprise. Another one was Lex's conversation to Lois at the end of the last chapter. I never saw that coming and that totally suits Lex's character.

3) Seeing the wedding from Clark's POV would have been nice. Maybe seeing their trip to the Fortress from Jason's because it was a really big deal for him to be there for the first time.
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 01:40 am (UTC)
That was a nice touch to have Lois wear her wedding ring around her neck since that is the only place she can keep it for the time being. But that makes me wonder where Clark is keeping his because he can't wear it as Clark or as Superman. -- Good question! Well, Clark is basically wearing it around his neck, too, where it can't be seen, but he'll put it someplace safe when he's Superman. Although, even as fast as he is... I can easily see that it could get lost, or accidentally seen by the wrong person. I mean, what does Superman do these days in the comics?

But what I really liked was when Jimmy congratulated her and Clark with their story. It definitely was like old times. -- Yes, old times. Too bad poor Richard is an outsider with that... I really feel for him.

Richard will be hurting for a while and hopefully the right girl will come along and he can have the same type of relationship that Lois and Clark have. -- I really hope they do give him a love interest in the next one. He deserves that.

It will be tough on them until they can make their relationship public but they will be able to handle it and other things together. -- Yes, they will! I think it will be an interesting next couple of months for the two of them, though. :)

So many people are mentioning the Fortress wedding! Wow, and I was so nervous about that before posting. Also glad that Lex surprised you. I think I will try to write something from Clark's or Jason's POV next up.

Thanks for all the wonderful help you were along the way with this, Mark. Huge *hugs*
empressaurelius
Feb. 13th, 2007 12:40 am (UTC)
Aaw, hon, what a GREAT ending! This story has been quite the ride. Thank you. ♥ Of course, a sequel would be fantastic!


1) Hmm....I think the scene where Lois first started to remember what had happened, after kissing Clark on the couch.

2) That Lois eventually remembered pretty much everything, actually.

3) Maybe some of the scenes at the Fortress, from Clark's POV.
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 01:43 am (UTC)
Thank you! Well, no sequel in the works, yet. I will answer my Muse if she comes to call, though. :)

Ah, the kissing/getting memories back scene. One of my faves, too! At the time, no one in the fandom had done it (and I read everything being published to be sure about that!!) Now kissing to get the memories back is pretty common -- lol. It just seemed natural to me, but my Lois had pretty much figured it out before she kissed him.

Okay, so Clark at the Fortress. Check. ;)

Thanks for all the reviews, hon! It meant so much!
jenn_1
Feb. 13th, 2007 12:46 am (UTC)
I almost want to cry for Richard. I liked the ending though you end it in a cliffie, evil you.

To answer your third question, it would have cool to see some of the fic in Clark's POV, I'm not sure what scenes. But one thing comes to mind, I think it would have been cute to to have the chapter when Jason learns that Clark is his father from his POV, it was the Once Upon Time one, or something like that I think.

I'm glad this fic as come to an end. Wonderful Job. Too bad the sequeal to SR won't be half as great as this fic.
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 01:45 am (UTC)
Definitely evil me. Heh.

Oh, yes, Jason's POV on learning the truth... that's a good one. I will think seriously about that.

The sequel won't be as good? Man, what a nice thing to say. I hope it is good though, so that the franchise can continue! *prays*
alphielj
Feb. 13th, 2007 12:50 am (UTC)
That wasn't the ending I was expecting, but since when has any part of this story been expected? I have a real soft spot for Richard, so that whole conversation, as truthful as it was, really was painful to read. If you do write a sequel, and I hope you do, would you be so kind as to hook him up with a nice OC? LOL! And SUCH an evil ending. EVIL! But you wouldn't be the ECQ if you didn't end it that way. You relize that you MUST write a sequel now? MUST! MUST! MUST!

I wish I could be more original that miaake, but I pretty much have to echo those answers.

1) What was the most memorable part of this story? - The whole scene at the Fortress of Solitude was just so credibly done. From Jason's questions to the way they got the consol working again to the marriage. Sigh... I loved it. I also loved the way they explained to Jason about his real parentatge. Such a nice moment for this unusual family.
2) What surprised you the most? 100% the marriage. I assumed that they would get married at some point, but they way it was done was a real shock. A GOOD shock, too!
3) What scenes would you like to have seen from a different character’s (other than Lois) point of view? Well... you can probably guess what I'm going to say... I'd love to see how you tackel anything from Jason's PoV, espeically finding out that Clark is his real father.
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 01:51 am (UTC)
Yes, I agree that Richard needs a good woman. I don't think I will set him up JUST yet, though. *shifty eyes* I have my reasons.

Evilness is my game... so I just couldn't help myself! I do like a twist ending, I really do. But not all of my fics end that way. Only 2-3 of the 11.

Well, considering how worried I was, I'm thrilled at how many people are citing the Fortress scenes! And yes, for you, I'll definitely consider writing stuff from Jason's POV very soon. But you are the Queen of Jason fics, how can I compete?
alphielj
Feb. 13th, 2007 12:51 am (UTC)
Sorry - I should have said more original than MARK! I misread who posted first.
therealmarajade
Feb. 13th, 2007 01:31 am (UTC)
I'm so happy I decided to check my flist once more before I went to bed! That was quite a surprise - and a very good one at that! :D

I think you are the only one who has succesfully made me like Richard and be truly sad about his destiny - he was always the man who stole Lois from Super to me, and you made him such a 3-dimensional characater! I know Bryan Singer did a very good job on the movie, but still...you had more time to describe him, I guess.

One of your paragraphs in this chapter pretty much sumarizes that 3D Richard you created so masterfully!

“I won’t pretend to be happy about it… but it’s obvious to me there’s a deep love that I had no hope of coming between. Your life with him was simply interrupted. I hope you’ll finally be happy – it’s all I ever wanted for you, Lois.”

As for your Lois and Clark...well, what's not to like? Lois is, well, LOIS, so very much MORE Lois than Kate Bosworth ever was, so much MORE Teri Hatcher, no, MARGOT KIDDER with Teri's good looks. A cunning reporter with a mellow heart. And yet, you have shown her as a flawed woman, but a flawed woman who recognizes her mistakes, like in this paragraph:

It was trite, but absolutely true… and it wasn’t enough. It would never be enough. Nor until the right woman came along to heal the wounds she had so casually inflicted.

Clark...well, Clark was Clark. All around Earth's greatest hero, but deep down inside a naïve farmboy in love with the famous reporter, but too worried about what was proper, what was right, what his father Jor-El expected him to do to send it all to hell just to be with the woman he loved...well, at least not for a second time anyway! After all, the first time Zod almost conquered Earth!

I loved the Clois interaction in this chapter, though I fear their cover will soon be blown up if they don't behave themselves!

As for the ending...you really are a cliffhanger queen! XD Don't keep us waiting long for the sequel! :P
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 02:01 am (UTC)
I think you are the only one who has succesfully made me like Richard and be truly sad about his destiny - he was always the man who stole Lois from Super to me, and you made him such a 3-dimensional character! -- I've heard this a lot, and maybe I just have a soft spot for the third person in a triangle. But I always felt in my heart that Lois wouldn't have started a serious relationship with just anyone. He had to be pretty super to take Superman's place while he was away.

Lois is, well, LOIS, so very much MORE Lois than Kate Bosworth ever was, so much MORE Teri Hatcher, no, MARGOT KIDDER with Teri's good looks. A cunning reporter with a mellow heart. And yet, you have shown her as a flawed woman, but a flawed woman who recognizes her mistakes -- THANK YOU for this comment! I think the beauty of writing from Lois' POV is that I could really show what I felt was the REAL Lois Lane. She was basically Margot's fire, Teri's playfulness and gutsiness, Erica's snark and Kate's mothering and looks. It really depended on the situation.

I loved the Clois interaction in this chapter, though I fear their cover will soon be blown up if they don't behave themselves! -- Oh, yes, they're going to have to be careful. Luckily the main players - Jimmy, Richard, Perry - are already in on it. :)

The sequel won't be any time soon -- but I'll keep my mind open for one. Thank you for your constant encouragment and reviewing! And for introducing me to LJ!!
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therealmarajade
Feb. 13th, 2007 01:35 am (UTC)
1) What was the most memorable part of this story? The Fortress of Solitude scenes. When Lois finds out Clark really is Superman.
2) What surprised you the most? I think it was Clark telling Richard the truth. Yes, more than the marriage - they would marry sooner or later, it was sooner than expected, but not completely unexpected.
3) What scenes would you like to have seen from a different character’s (other than Lois) point of view? Jason learning that Clark is his real father.
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 03:08 am (UTC)
The Fortress scenes... wow, I definitely have to consider doing that. So many requests!

Richard knowing the truth? Just always seemed inevitable if he was going to be a major part of the story!

And one more vote for Jason's POV about the truth!
mssupafan
Feb. 13th, 2007 02:56 am (UTC)
1) What was the most memorable part of this story?
1) What was the most memorable part of this story?

I loved all of the story, but For me..It was chapter 39 was the MOST memorable..YES, I AM a SMUT LOVER!! I was the most MIND BOGGLING, HEART THUDDING, SENSUAL, SEXUAL scene that STILL runs thorough my mind!
GAH!!


oh and happy v-day!



sunlike
Feb. 13th, 2007 03:22 pm (UTC)
Re: 1) What was the most memorable part of this story?
I second that too, lol!
elliania
Feb. 13th, 2007 02:57 am (UTC)
I just can't believe it's already the end... *sniff* God, I loved that story!! Wow! I think I'll have to read it again, from the beginning. ^-^

What a ending, you cruel! *hugs* I wouldn't have expect for anything different, though! ^-^

It was an amazing story, I just don't know what anwsered to give at your questions. Beside, I'm not sure I remember everything right... but I'll try my best:

What was the most memorable part of this story? I loved the way she remembered. And all the action/intrigue! Richard was amazing, as much as Jason! The final in the Forteress of Solitude was awesome, but I think the chapter I really felt in love with was the one in which Lois explain thing to Jason as a Fairy tale! Too beautiful!

What surprised you the most? Clark asking her to marry him! Beautiful, romantic and perfect... but unexpected by me, I have to say!

What scenes would you like to have seen from a different character’s (other than Lois) point of view? Hmmm... I don't know... I love the way you write it, even the scene where Lois wasn't there, you find a way to explain anything to us, it was pretty awesome! I'll have to think about it and give you my answer later! ^^

In the end, I think I really need to tell you ♥ Thank You ♥ for that wonderful story who made me dreams!! *hugs*

And once again, I'm sorry for all my awkward english comments!! ^^' But I think you got the point: I've loved it all along!
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 03:19 am (UTC)
I think I'll have to read it again, from the beginning. ^-^ -- You'll get no complaints from me! And if you see something on second reading that you'd like to comment on, please do!

The way Lois remembered, that was the seed that started the story, and the action/intrigue is what kept it going! Glad you liked that, too. :) Richard, Jason -- excellent additions to the Superman-verse, thank Singer for that, I just played "pretend" with them.

Sigh... I do love writing weddings. This was my second one - I always seem to marry the main couple of the fandom in my fics...
ancarett
Feb. 13th, 2007 03:59 am (UTC)
O! We have our happy ending and a wrap. Well, until the next story idea bites in this (or any other) universe. I love the happy ending, even if it was a bit shaken with the discussion with Richard and the final phone call. These two can be so happy together, though, can't they?

Onto your questions:
1) What was the most memorable part of this story?
I think that would have to be the lugging out of the mass of kryptonite after Lois realized what was happening in Chapter Nine. It was a great scene of protective!Lois despite her upset.

2) What surprised you the most?
The revelation with Richard on the roof of the Planet. It made perfect sense but I wasn't expecting it at ALL!

3) What scenes would you like to have seen from a different character’s (other than Lois) point of view?
Hmmm, I'm not sure that I would have changed anything. Lois is central to the story of revelations and returns, here.
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 03:30 am (UTC)
Well, the next story idea has bitten... but it's for Monk. I do have a few tiny odds and ends of sequel ideas floating, but the main "God - I have to write that!!" gut-punch has not hit me. (I do get one of those for each and every story I've published - if it doesn't hit me like a flash - it's not worth writing down)

Lois thinks fast on her feet, doesn't she? She dealt with the K efficiently and quickly... but it also gave me a chance to let her vent and deal with the revelation away from Clark!

Telling Richard always made sense to me. It just seemed like the only way to give him the respect he deserved.

Thanks for all your reviews and support! It's been wonderful! *hugs*
ellalou73
Feb. 13th, 2007 05:30 am (UTC)
OH that was evil of you, but as you said it keeps it open and I for one will vote that you write another one. Well lets see favorite part, romantic me, I loved when he proposed to her at the Fortress and they got married there and had a good time.

I don't think I would change anything. You kept it eveyone in line and I hate to see this story come to an end. By the way I love your frisky Valentines Day STory..

And now for this chapter. I loved that she had to keep that silly grin off of her face and hide the fact that they were married. I will hope they an reveal it after they catch Luthor and nail his butt grr he's bad one.

I like Jimmy's mention of old times Lane and Kent getting a story and Lois thinking back to how it used to be when she and Clark would work on a story, and she would spent all night talking to His alter ego, of coarse now she knows it all.

I felt bad for Richard and each version, yours and others that I read I wonder how it will go down when the next movie comes out. I could feel the tension when she was in there with him and the sadness as well. Her coworkers need to go take a flying leap, well all accept for Perry and Jimmy...

I had forgotten all about Lex, even though I just said something about him in the paragraph above. When he called her and revealed what he knew I wanted to jump out of my seat, wait I did that haha,

Okay please please write more.. *Gets down on hands and knees and begs the Queen for more story...*

You did a really really great job and I have enjoyed reading it and coming home to find another great chapter.
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 03:46 am (UTC)
The romance was definitely a great part to write. I really enjoyed it immensely, but it was hard knowing that the proposal, marriage and consummation were coming, and not being able to say anything! I think with the open commentary style of LJ, it's kind of amazing I was able to keep my mouth shut!

Yes, Luthor is a bad one. He's quite a sticky villain to get around. If I write this sequel, he will be the main focus of the plot, although I will have to dream up different stuff than mr_beeto used in his story!

I really wonder what will happen with Richard in the sequel, too! I sure hope he's around, and treated correctly. He's not a toss-away character.

sunlike
Feb. 13th, 2007 03:17 pm (UTC)
So sad that it has come to an end :(

I´m going to miss this fic. It begs for a sequel indeed, Luthor will never leave them be. :(
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 04:13 am (UTC)
I am sad, but relieved... this story had taken over my life! But I'm really glad that I touched so many of you with it!

A sequel... someday, maybe. Nothing planned yet. But I'll listen if the Muse calls.

Thank you for all your reviews and support!
sunlike
Feb. 13th, 2007 03:20 pm (UTC)
ETA: There´s so much I could say but I can´t...

just add that Richard was a very honorable man, but Lois and Clark do deserve to be together. There´s so much pain, specially in Clark´s life. All he wanted was to be accepted, to have a family, to be one of the "team", boy I can relate to that, never felt the integration too, so I´m very pleased how it ended. :)

Thank you
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 04:15 am (UTC)
It pleases my little heart that they are together, too. I love them together, so much more than apart. Now I can write all kinds of married Clois stories! Hee!
alamo_girl80
Feb. 13th, 2007 04:16 pm (UTC)
Oh wow! What a great, clifie style ending! I love it!

Here are some things I loved:
"oh, God, I would have given anything for you to have looked at me that way… even once" - GUH! That right htere pretty much sums up thier relationship. I tried to bring that out in my fic as well, but putting that here at the end was utterly brilliant!

Wonderful job with Luthor getting in the last word. I can't tell you how much I love this ending - even though I may be in the minority for loving the twist and not having a fluffy ending. Fluff just doesn't seem to be my cup-o-tea these days! WUBS me some Lex!!! GAH!

Here are your questions:
1) What was the most memorable part of this story?
2) What surprised you the most?
3) What scenes would you like to have seen from a different character’s (other than Lois) point of view?

1. Probably Lois' reaction when she discovers Clark's ID. I still remember her stalking close to him with that meteorite, just to make him squirm a little..not quite a kryptonite enema...but hey, it was evil fun! (and the sex scene, of course. I always remember the sex...*evil hee!*)

2. Hmm. Mostly some of the things in the B-plot, because you know how much I loved the B-plot. You wound a lot of the clue together in ways that I wasn't expecting, which was good, cause with all the crime dramas and mysteries I read and watch, its hard to throw me. Monk would have been proud of you! *wink*

3. Well, I like getting Clark's POV sometimes, simply because its fun, and somewhat of a challange to get in the head of a man for a little while. We (as women) can all identify with Lois, her feelings and thoughts, but geting into Richard's or Clark's minds can be a little harder. That's why I try to challenge myself in my own fic with Clark POV. But you soared with Lois, so Bravo on that. And you conveyed Clark's feelings, through Lois' eyes very well.

Wonderful job on a spectacular story, Barb! I'm in awe of it and your skills. *bows to the ECQ*

htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 08:15 pm (UTC)
It's funny, waiting until the end to have Richard really admit he wasn't the one for her -- betty had been asking me to give him "a moment of grace" for such a long time, and I kept saying, "in his last scene, okay?" And it turned out to be the last chapter. I guess I needed him to go through a lot of emotions and reactions before he did that. *shrugs*

You actually are not in the minority for loving the twist! I got a lot of pleased comments about that! I mean, I guess if a reader has become a fan despite all the evil cliffies... then they must like them!

I will definitely write some of whatever fic comes next in Clark's POV. I promise! It'll be fun... haven't done it since Then And Now.

Thank you for all your cheerleading, reviewing, hilarity... everything! *wubs*

The revelation was central to Act 1, and really made a difference in the way the story went after that. And the sex? Well, the struggles of our couple (and the writer's own hair-pulling) must have been worth it! ;)

I loved the B-plot, too. I'm ALL about the B-plot, or the romance just falls flat. Glad you agree!
maaike_fluffy
Feb. 13th, 2007 04:25 pm (UTC)
Awww.... the end of DV! God, I'm going to miss this story.

Of course, you had to live up to your title, and end it with an cliffie... or to quote you:

“’The End’?” Jason asked doubtfully.

“More like… ‘To be continued.’”

htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 08:21 pm (UTC)
Oh, I love that... quote me in a review... I actually said the same words to my daughter last night, "The End?" (she was telling ME a bedtime story - 3-year old stories are pretty convoluted), and she paused. I immediately thought of what you said in this review. lol. Of course, then she said with a nod, "The End!"

This is THE END until a new idea strikes. Don't expect anything right away, but it's a definite possibility.

Thank you for everything - all the reviews, all the love!
irvine_selphie
Feb. 13th, 2007 05:00 pm (UTC)
Oh man, this is the perfect ending to a perfect story! Thank you!
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 08:32 pm (UTC)
Oh, wow, thank you! I'm honored that you took the time to review my story. I noticed that you reviewed a few things at 12days_of_clois. Do you know slicedpigeon? She also lives in Singapore. I visited there in March of 2000, and had a great time.

*kisses*
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sean_montgomery
Feb. 13th, 2007 09:57 pm (UTC)
I'm torn right now - part of me wants to sit for the rest of my life in denial that this story is over, and the other half wants to be the Super!Reviewer and get on with the unashamed praise. But, as they say, all good things come to an end. Time to get over myself.

*takes one look at the page*

*bursts into tears*

*steadies herself - reads*

In a lot of ways, I'm speechless when it comes to this chapter. So many things were resolved, but others were left wide open. I'm going to join alamo_girl80 in saying that the ending was competely perfect (and you know how much I think it is *wink*), but I also agree with miaake_fluffy with her line from your story. More like, 'To be continued...", indeed. ; )

And now, to close the final chapter on this epic, I try my best to bury the feeling of pain in my heart with the joy of discovering this story and everything it brought me: it brought me you - comrad, beta, friend, older sister, and a dear treasure. And I'm honored, Barbara, to have taken this journey with you - even if I was a little late for the party.

An absolute masterpiece in the SR fanfiction world, and one that will get numerous recommendations from me to others. Congratulations on completing one of the greatest fics in this fandom!
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 08:51 pm (UTC)
Aw, Abby, I know it's sad, but just think of it this way... now I can write even more stories for your enjoyment! DV has been a bit of a proving ground for me, and I hope I'll just improve as I go!

You were late to the party, but only a little, really. You more than made up for it, I guarantee! *kisses and hugs*
mary_v
Feb. 13th, 2007 11:29 pm (UTC)
woohoohoooooooooo!:D This was one hell of a story; you took me for a ride that I won't be recovering from any time soon!:D
But can there pleeeeeeeease be a sequel? Because that would just be the best thing to ever happen in the face of Lois/Clark fanfiction! Seriously; words cannot express how much this fic was amazing!

And if there is a sequel( *begs and prays*), I would love for you to scoop in as much fluff between Lois and Clark as possible... I mean angst is welcome... but I would also like to see a whole lot of kissin':P:P looool:P

And you are so EVIL! But I still love you!:D

And to answer your questions:
1) What was the most memorable part of this story? Definitely the last couple of chapters; the wedding and the wedding night ;):P and also this chapter; the whole interaction between Lois and Clark.
2) What surprised you the most? How evil your cliffhangers are! LOL Seriously though, I don't really know how to answer this question; you really write in such a way that anything that happens that is surprising is justified later on and seems like the most obvious thing. But I do have to say I'm surprised at the phone call between Luthor and Lois, and how he knows they're together... it makes me wonder does he have a spy? does he know Clark is Superman? Questions galore and we have to wait for the sequel, which is coming who knows when!?:P
3) What scenes would you like to have seen from a different character’s (other than Lois) point of view? Uh... well I would have liked to see the "moments" between lois and Clark from Jimmy's point of view... I love Jimmy:P What I really want to see is everyone's reaction when Lois and Clark go public with their relationship... I can see it now; Perry speechless for once, Jimmy smiling knowingly, etc etc.:P

Seriously hun, this was amazing and you don't know how much I would kill for a sequel! Seriously. I would. Well I'd kill bugs, not puppies of course, but still. :P


Amazing, amazing, amazing work!:D *applause*
~Maria~
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 09:11 pm (UTC)
Wow, a sequel? I don't know... Really, if I get the right idea for a sequel, I'll be sure to write it. I promise. :) And there will be fluff with the angst. They're married now, right? Gotta have the fluff.

Almost everyone seems to have liked the wedding! As much as I worried about that, it's really great to hear over and over again.

I think I went all the way with the evil cliffies in this story (more than usual), and it was wonderful the way everyone responded to them. Your questions about Luthor would definitely get answered in the sequel. I promise. I also loved that comment about how things surprised you, but later made perfect sense. That really warms my heart. :)

Jimmy moments, check. That would be fun, wouldn't it?

Thanks for all the reviews! *hugs*
kabuki_party
Feb. 14th, 2007 03:21 am (UTC)
omfg! How does Luthor know about all of that? and because of that, Does he know clark is superman?! I hope we don't have to wait til 2009 when superman piques your interest again to find out ;)
1) I LOVED when she realized he was superman, and she just without a second thought kisses him.
2) what surprised me most...hmm..how lois and clark kept themselves from each other. how they didn't just jump all over each other when she knew who he was and they were working side by side. I know I wouldn't be able to..
3) I want to know what was going through clark's mind when he rescued her from the vault!
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 09:31 pm (UTC)
Well, Luthor knows something all right... but how much? And how? That's the real question. I hope it isn't until 2009 when I would write it, but one never knows.

Lois kissing Clark to get the memories back was actually a first - but now almost everyone does it, lol. I'm glad I was able to jump in early with that. And it's all Clark as far as not jumping all over each other. Lois would have done it a number of times, I think!! ;) I will have to write a Lois rescue from Clark's POV sometime, won't I...

Thank you for all your lovely reviews, it meant so much!
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seraphkre
Feb. 14th, 2007 08:58 am (UTC)
It's over?? But... but... but... ::bottom lip quivers::

Okay, I knew it was ending, but still... I just found you!! Wait... ::mentally counts:: Okay, it's been a few weeks since I practically killed myself reading your fic, but I've been hanging on to the latest updates like they're gold. :) Would that I'd jumped onto ff.net sooner, and had the guts to start writing fanfic again - although I'll definitely be checking out your other stories too.

As for your questions...

1) What was the most memorable part of this story?
For me, it was most definitely the "fairy-tale" that Lois told Jason. That whole chapter just blew me away. The love, respect and care that all three of these three adults have for this one beautiful child is just amazing. And the fact that they all respect and care for each other, albeit on different levels and in different ways, was just hammered home for me. I honestly hadn't thought of Richard they way you do, until you explained that Lois couldn't have possibly fallen for him otherwise. And then, watching the special features the other night, I finally picked up on Bryan Singer saying the same thing. It's actually changed my view of his character a LOT.

2) What surprised you the most?
I have to go with so many other people here when I say "the proposal." :D I honestly didn't see that coming - and certainly not the wedding! But the proposal just about dropped me through the floor. I mean, yeah, it's inevitable - it's Clark and Lois for cryin' out loud! They're practically up there with Romeo and Juliet when it comes to famous fictional couples (though, hopefully not so tragic as that!). But I really had no idea that you were throwing that curve ball until it hit me. :D

3) What scenes would you like to have seen from a different character’s (other than Lois) point of view?
Not sure, actually. Although, I think I'd really like to see you write some kind of one-shot from Richard's point of view. You seem to have a really innate understanding of his character. Maybe the revelation that Jason isn't his biological son. (But, jeez, how much heartbreak can one guy take?)

Oh, and to answer your question from my last comments, my son is 5, and a massive handful. But he's a real sweetie too. Tonight while I was beta-ing a smut-fic for one of my friends, it took me two hours to get through six pages because he kept interrupting me with "Mom, I need a big hug." Which is so "awwwww," but at the same time it's so frustrating. lol! :D And yeah, we're stuck in the really annoying state of Utard (Utah) until I can get enough money together to move us back to Phoenix. Otherwise, playdates would be happening. :D

Thanks again for such a great fic, and the time you've committed to it - it really has been a wonderful time reading it. :) I sincerely hope you stick around the SR fandom - especially since there are so many great opportunities for random fluffy Clois fics, and occassional one-shots. You've set a very high standard for a lot of people.
htbthomas
Feb. 14th, 2007 09:48 pm (UTC)
Yeah, I felt kind of sorry for the people who jumped on at the end! But hey! You didn't suffer the agony of 7 months worth of waiting for updates... I have a few other SR stories, but they are all pretty short in comparison. One-shots and a three chapter piece. They'll be easy to take in. The other stuff is Spidey. And I'm not sure how you feel about Spidey! Plus, I've grown quite a bit as a writer since then... but I would absolutely not be upset if you read and reviewed them all!!

Richard is obviously my squishy, and it's true that I played that up A LOT, trying hard to make him the most noble, clever, interesting guy I could... because that really came across to me in the film. I actually have not watched those Special Features, yet... (bad bad fanfic writer)... so I'm glad to hear Singer mentioned that!

A Richard POV story? Okay, I definitely would give that some thought. That would be really fun to do, I think!

Oh, and even if you move back to Phoenix, I live in Ohio... dang. *snaps with disappointment* I will be around for the one-shots. There's another one coming up - and if you keep me on author alert on ff.net, you'll get notified right away.

*hugs*
solojones
Feb. 15th, 2007 08:28 am (UTC)
Sorry I haven't reviewed before now. I've been really busy and dying to read but just now got the time.

First of all, you know this is coming, but yeah, that truly was an evil ending! You definitely deserve a break, but if you should decide to write a sequel in the (near? ;)) future, you know we'll all be lapping it up.

Ok, as always, I love the way you handle Richard. He really deserves to not just be pitied but to be seen as a whole human. You know what I find ironic about his situation, which your characterization of him highlights for me? He's like Clark, before Lois knows he's Superman: a really nice guy who's crazily in love with her, but whom she just can't see that way. I would too hope that he'd find a woman who loves him the way Lois loves Superman. You actually almost made me cry on Richard's behalf in this scene... but then once the tears were welling up, I sneezed instead :P

I like the way you've brought the story to a conclusion, closed off an era of their lives, but still left it open. Not just with Luthor, but everything- how they'll deal with the new relationship, how they'll break it at work, the possible repercussions of the article... yeah, it's just dying for a sequel. But as an author, you probably don't need us to tell you that ;)

Now, I'd really like to be able to respond to those other three questions, but I feel I'd be doing you a disservice. I read through the first 35 chapters so quickly, I think I can't give you my honest feedback on them yet. I am really keen on going back and re-reading the whole thing very soon... is it all right if answer your questions after a second reading? You do deserve quality feedback and hopefully I'd be better at providing.

Well in any case, BRAVO on the accomplishment of first of all just completing such a novel. But many, many times more compliments on doing it so very well. All in all, easily one of the top 5 fanfics I have ever read, and I've read hundreds. I've been so glad to have come across this story. Keep writing!
htbthomas
Feb. 15th, 2007 11:58 am (UTC)
Ah, hey, I was wondering where you'd gotten off to! But I never actually worry unless a whole week has passed and one of my "regulars" (yes, that means you) hasn't reviewed yet.

I don't know how near a sequel is, especially with three other things in the pipeline. But last night I got three plot bunnies for SR while chatting with one of my Spidey friends! So you never know.

Well, that's EXACTLY what Richard is, after all, a personification of Superman without the powers. However, the poor thing - he's the perfect guy in every way, really, but that one spark is missing. He needs to find the right woman. I know he will... someday.

Hey, I would NOT mind if you reread. In fact, go to the beginning of this story on LJ (convenient link to the right over there...) and leave commentary! If there's something that you remember was a surprise or a fave moment, you can comment right then and there! :D

Top 5 of hundreds! Wow! That is a major compliment. *blush* Thank you for being so supportive!
taro_twist
Feb. 17th, 2007 03:38 am (UTC)
Part One

“You can pass this on to him as well… if he isn’t already listening. I wish the two of you the best of luck in your new life together.”

As Lois and Clark looked at each other in speechless horror, the line went dead.


Ahh! AAAAAAAHHHHHH!!!!!!! How could you? HOW COULD YOU??????

*collects self*

Okay, okay, you're right, I guess I couldn't expect anything else from the Evil Cliffie Queen. This ending has your style written all over it. ^-^ And on the up-side, this does mean that there's plenty of room for a sequel! *cheers*

Aside from the penultimate cliff-hanger from hell, though (*grin*), this chapter was a great way to wrap everything up. I especially liked the exchange Richard and Lois had. Of course things wouldn't look up for Richard in the space of this chapter, but it's great that he wants Lois to be happy, and that it's obvious that he's willing to be friendly with her--for Jason's sake, if nothing else! I'm glad that Richard knows about their marriage, too. As one of Jason's parents (and after having been so intimate with Lois before) he deserves to know that she and Clark are married. So yay for that!

And it was a nice touch to show all of their other coworkers' reactions as well: Jimmy being excited and eager (a little too eager, lol), Perry slowly getting used to the idea, and everyone else just being plain clueless.

And I loved the detail about that treasured look that Lois gave Clark when he walked in (that had "happy ending" written all over it :) ), and also about how hard it was for her to keep from smiling.

And this line:

Now stop looking at me like that or we’ll blow our cover… because I’ll end up dragging your sexy bod by your ugly, old-fashioned tie into that closet over there.

Mmmm ... oh yes, Lois, please do ... (Deja Vu outtake? Maaaayyybeeee? lol)

And this line:

Whatever it takes, we’ll deal with it. Our love has survived a memory wipe, an unexpected pregnancy and several brushes with death. We are stronger together than we ever were apart.

Yes, I think movieverse Clois is the textbook example of "love conquers all." :D (On a really random side note, did Lois ever find out in this fic that Clark turned back time to save her? I can't remember ... that part of the movies has been on my mind lately for some reason, though, lol, so I was just curious ...)

Man, now you've got me so intrigued over Luthor, though. It makes sense that he would have bugged the Fortress while he was stealing the crystals (if that's what actually happened). Hmmm ... dammit, I'm going to be thinking about this now, lol.

htbthomas
Feb. 17th, 2007 02:56 pm (UTC)
Thank you, Christine! I love your LONG, LONG reviews. You and sean_montgomery spoil me so much!

How could I?? Well, you answered your own question there. ;) And yes, if the sequel idea hits me upside the head, I'll shake myself and listen.

I'm glad that Richard knows about their marriage, too. As one of Jason's parents (and after having been so intimate with Lois before) he deserves to know that she and Clark are married. -- It's a tough thing to deal with, and I tend not to be a "tie everything up by the end of the story" kind of writer. But yes, Richard needed to know. Glad you agree!

Deja Vu outtake? -- Hmm. Okay, I will seriously think about that one. HEE!

On a really random side note, did Lois ever find out in this fic that Clark turned back time to save her? -- No, not in this fic. But I would probably cover that in a later one. After all, they are only now getting to really talking honestly. It'll take a while for all of that to come out. My husband and I still learn new things about each other after all these years...

Man, now you've got me so intrigued over Luthor, though. It makes sense that he would have bugged the Fortress while he was stealing the crystals (if that's what actually happened). -- Just to put a REALLY evil bug in your ear, there's more than one way for Luthor to know what he knows... and how MUCH does he know? I left that purposely unclear. ^o_o^
taro_twist
Feb. 17th, 2007 03:43 am (UTC)
Part Two

As for your specific questions:

1) What was the most memorable part of this story?

Definitely the reveal. I think that's among the best I've ever seen, if not the best. The build up of tension leading towards it was just ... delicious! I can't think of a better word. *grin*

2) What surprised you the most?

Two things surprised me equally. The first was when Lois left Richard in the middle of their romantic dinner and dashed to Clark's apartment. I was expecting it to take a lot more chapters than that, and then all of a sudden BAM! She's running off into the rain, lol.

The second thing was the Fortress wedding. Again, I thought they would take it a lot slower than that. (I think this idea was also somewhat helped out by my misinterpretaton of part of your Xmas one-shot, which made me think that it took a few months after the events in this story for them to even start dating. Looking back, though, I guess when Lois said the thing about them not being together yet when Clark planned their vacation, she probably meant that they weren't together publicly?) Yeah, but I was possibly more shocked than Lois when Clark proposed, lol.

Both of these scenes were realistic and in character, though! They just caught me off guard. :)

3) What scenes would you like to have seen from a different character’s (other than Lois) point of view?

Ahhh ... there's so many! But to just pick a couple: I would have loved to see the reveal scene from Clark's POV. And I would have liked to see the scene where Clark and Richard are working to find Lois from Richard's POV.

But anyway, fantastic fantastic job with this story, and many congratulations on finishing!!!! I'll look forward to your one shots (and the possibility of a sequel XD). In any case, thank you so much for writing this--it's definitely one of the best fics in the Superman Returns fandom, and was a real pleasure to read. :D

p.s.
And good luck with all of your writing in the future!
htbthomas
Feb. 17th, 2007 03:01 pm (UTC)
I'm really glad you liked the reveal. I worried about it so much, writing practically non stop so that I could get it published before anyone else did it first... but I couldn't rush it either. I knew it had to have all of that build-up to be realistic. Lois wouldn't just kiss Clark without those suspicions forming in her mind again.

And the surprises. Yes, they were meant to be very surprising. However, I'm really glad they seemed in character to you. Whew. I did enjoy throwing those at everyone. :)

Clark's POV I think I can find time to write in again. I find him easy. And those two scenes are ones I really wanted to switch POV's for, but just never could, because of the restraints of this story. So maybe later!
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ladymackenzie
Feb. 17th, 2007 10:28 am (UTC)
[FEEDBACK] Déjà Vu
Hi, I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed your fic Déjà Vu and Dinner Plans. I'm not really good at reviews. For some reason I'm better at beating. Anyway, I just wanted to say that I loved it and I hope that you will write a sequel. I know that your story has sparked something in my mind for a possible fic, but not sure if I will have the guts to write it. Afraid that I might mix up fic universes. LOL I have read so many since Christmas. That's when my mother (thank you Mama!) gave my son Superman Returns and I finally got to see it! If I do get the nerve to write a Superman fic, it will be set in the future. Maybe I don't have to go into detail on how Lois and Clark end up together?

What sparked the possible future fic was what Lois told Richard after he found her wedding ring around her neck. She said that there was someone out there for him. I started thinking about that and got a couple of ideas.

What would I like to see happen in a possible sequal? How about #1. Luthor needs to be there causing some sort of trouble. And then he needs to be cuaght. Maybe let the court put him on Death Row? #2. How about we see from Jason's point of view Richard dating some woman. In my fantasy world, Richard gets visitation rights with Jason. At some point during the relationship with this woman, Jason does something that the woman doesn't like and then she starts to verbally/emtionally abuse him. This goes on for a while, until somehow Clark and Lois find out. Richard has no idea and when he finds out he dumps the b***h. Then I would like to see end up with Lois' sister, Lucy. Don't ask me why. It's just what I feel like should happen.

Before reading Déjà Vu, I had always thought that Richard would end up alone or dead right after or right before he and Lois broke up.

Anyway. Again I really enjoyed reading your fic. I hope that there is a sequel and I can't wait to read it! (Even if you don't use my suggestions) :-)

Mac
htbthomas
Feb. 17th, 2007 03:26 pm (UTC)
Re: [FEEDBACK] Déjà Vu
Hey, thank you for reviewing, even if you are better at "beating" (I know that's a typo... lol... but for what? I find those little typos in my comments to other people all the time. Darn you LJ for not allowing comments to be edited!) ;)

What sparked the possible future fic was what Lois told Richard after he found her wedding ring around her neck. She said that there was someone out there for him. -- Um, not to give TOO much away, but a friend of mine has been thinking of a Richard-based sequel, and there is someone for him in it. But it isn't Lucy... or an OC... and I have been sworn to secrecy. That being said, I wouldn't mind seeing what YOU would come up with, if you're interested! :D

Luthor would definitely be a MAJOR part of the sequel, in ways he never was in DV. He was always meant to be a shadowy sort of menace in this one. That is, whenever my Muse wants to write it.

Thank you again!
Re: [FEEDBACK] Déjà Vu - ladymackenzie - Feb. 19th, 2007 05:32 am (UTC) - Expand
Re: [FEEDBACK] Déjà Vu - htbthomas - Feb. 19th, 2007 05:34 pm (UTC) - Expand
mithah
Feb. 18th, 2007 05:29 am (UTC)
You evil, evil, EVIL woman. What. A. Story! This is so like you, to leave us all on the edge of our seats, crying and begging for more! God, it’s just…indescribable. I can’t believe this is over…and that you left it on such a note! Wowowowowow.

You made me love Richard, and then you break my heart with the cliffhanger to end all cliffhangers. Must be the sign of an excellent writer…if not an ECQ!

1) What was the most memorable part of this story?
The moment when Lois made THE connection (between Clark and Superman, that is). That was…that was powerful stuff, to say the least.
2) What surprised you the most?
That Richard White could be a likable character. That I could feel okay about absolutely fictionally falling in love with someone that doesn’t fly around in a little red cape. You completely changed my opinion on him, Barbara. Completely. Now if only you could do the same about Starfire…
3) What scenes would you like to have seen from a different character’s (other than Lois) point of view?
Hmm, that’s a tough one. Well, THE connection moment would have bee really interesting to see from Clark’s perspective, obviously. Also, the scene where Jason learns of his true parentage would have been totally intense from Jason himself. And I’m extremely intrigued to what was running behind Richard’s eyes during the "rooftop reveal," as I am now dubbing it.

All in all, a truly delightful, thought-provoking, entertaining story from beginning to end…and one that personally opened the door to all the other superfic out there for me. This is both a sad and exhilarating moment…all I can say now is SEQUEL!!!!!

Cheers!
htbthomas
Feb. 18th, 2007 01:11 pm (UTC)
Well, Michelle, I'm delighted at your reaction. *pleased grin* I adore being evil, sometimes...

And I must say, a lot of people are noting Lois and Clark's revelation scene. With as many as I've read (since it is a cornerstone of the Clois fandom in any incarnation), it's easy for them to all swirl together in my mind. I'm thrilled that so many people think this part stands out!

And as I've commented over and over again... loving Richard is all part of my evil plan. Actually, I never expected people to react the way they have to him. I was really taken by the character and just wrote him as I saw him. But the more people raved about it, the more I realized that my take was somewhat unusual. And now many of my other writer friends have adopted the same attitude. This makes me happy, indeed. :)

If I can, I will try to incorporate more of a revolving POV in the next story, or write my next 12 days of Clois stories from other points of view. Clark, Jason, Richard, Jimmy, Perry - they'll all get a turn if I can work it out!

As far as a sequel is concerned... well, I will do it, if the idea comes. My Muse is off on vacation, leaving me alone to rest and recuperate. But she'll probably be back soon!
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