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Déjà Vu: Chapter 30: Follow-Up

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A/N: A bit of trivia for you all. Way back when I was outlining Chapter 10, as I was discussing some point with one of my betas, I told her I thought this story would be about 15-20 chapters long. She said she hoped it would reach AT LEAST 30 chapters… And I responded (a direct quote from the email):
 
“OMG.... 30.... I will barely make it to 15 without imploding.... lol.  I can promise you, 30 is nigh impossible for me.  Let's say 15-20 for now.  *tries not to hyperventilate* Where’s that damn inhaler?!?”
 
So I have reached this unbelievable number of chapters (at least unbelievable back then) – and no implosion! And it’s thanks to your support. I see about 5-7 chapters left to the story by my general outline – but just how reliable that is…?
 
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Déjà Vu
 
Chapter 30: Follow-Up
 
Lois hurried down the sidewalk toward the deputy mayor’s office, pushing upstream through the pedestrian traffic. She had been trying all the way over to get through to the deputy mayor’s office, but could only get the voice mail. It had taken her taxi much too long to get here. On a Friday afternoon, rush hour started early, ended late… and she was going the wrong way. Please, let me just make it before they close…
 
She had left The Daily Planet within minutes of ending the phone call with Leyden. Every fiber of her being had been urging her to race out of the newsroom to follow the lead that had so miraculously dropped into her lap – but there was Jason to consider:
 
Lois cleared her throat, trying to seem braver than she was feeling right now. “Um… excuse me…?”
 
Richard stood beside his desk, looking through the photos that Jimmy had brought him. Was it just blind luck that he had come down from the roof just when she needed him? He looked up at her with haggard eyes. “Yes?” he asked in an almost too polite voice. 
 
“I just got off the phone with a contact in the story that C–” Lois stopped, and tried again. “I – I want to chase a lead.” She really hated to do this to Richard after everything that he’d gone through today, but there was really no choice…She quashed a painful twinge of guilt, so she could get out her request. “Do you mind picking up Jason today…?” she asked with a note of pleading in her voice.
 
Jimmy stood off to Richard’s right, looking for all the world as if he wanted to blend into the bookcases beside him. He couldn’t meet either of their eyes, trying to avoid being drawn into their personal drama. 
 
Richard glanced at the clock with barely concealed irritation. Then he closed eyes tightly, and took a heavy breath. “Sure,” he said tonelessly.
 
“Thank you, Richard,” she breathed gratefully. “And I would have asked C— but he’s still… on his errand…”
 
Richard’s eyes blazed then, full of I-told-you-so’s. “Go chase that lead.”
 
She was still grateful that she would not have to drag her little boy along this time, especially after what had happened with Luthor on the yacht….
 
Only a short distance from the wide marble steps in front of City Hall, Lois suddenly caught a flash of a red and blue in the corner of her eye. Clark…? She searched the sky above the buildings, but there was nothing there – only the whipping of Old Glory from a nearby flagpole. Her heart sank unexpectedly. 
 
Shaking her head at her silliness – he would be done when he was done – Lois pushed through the doors into the large, open lobby. For 4:30 in the afternoon, the place seemed surprisingly deserted. She hoped she wasn’t too late. Damn government offices and their strange hours…  The elevator ride suddenly felt interminable.
 
Her high heels clicked on the tile floors as she made her way to the deputy mayor’s office. Every office on the floor appeared to be shut and locked up tight. You’d think this was a Friday, she thought snidely. Turning the corner, she tried to look down the hall…
 
… And stopped short as a pretty, young blonde screeched to a halt to avoid running into her. “Excuse me,” Lois muttered, and tried to move past the woman. 
 
“Ms. Lane?”
 
Lois did a double take, looking more closely at the young woman’s face. Mitchener’s secretary… and it looked like she was on her way out… Dammit!
 
The bottle blonde smiled, and continued speaking before Lois could even respond. “The deputy mayor really liked the article you and your partner wrote the other day,” she enthused. “I think he might even get it framed.”
 
“Oh, really?” Lois affected a pleasant smile and a cordial tone. “Mr. Mitchener was quite…” she searched for the proper word, “… impressive during our interview.” Lois continued in the same manner, trying to draw the secretary in, “You know, I tried to call earlier to see if I could snag an appointment, but I couldn’t get through…”
 
The secretary blushed. “I'm sorry... I must have tied up the phone…” She continued in a coy voice, eyelids lowered, a ploy which Lois was sure was very effective on most people, “You see... there’s this guy…”
 
Looking at the girl's flushed cheeks and sparkling eyes, Lois couldn't resist the sudden sense of fellow feeling that swept over her. Despite her impatience, Lois couldn’t help but sympathize, still feeling the sense of newness and rediscovery that falling in love could bring. She chuckled dryly. “Oh?”
 
The girl clutched her fashionable handbag closer to her, and let out a small chuckle herself. “That's where I'm heading now,” she confided. 
 
“Oh, well, I hope you have fun,” Lois told her almost fondly. The young woman’s smile got even brighter, and she made as if to head back down toward the elevators. “But... if you don't mind... is he still in?” Lois nodded toward the office door. “I have some information I would like to double check with him, for a follow-up feature I’m writing.”
 
The small talk must have worked. “Sure,” the secretary said warmly, “He's still in. Do you want me to ask if he can see you?”
 
“If it’s not too much trouble…”
 
The blonde girl shook her head slightly. Spinning on her heel, she fished her office keys out of her handbag and unlocked the door. Lois followed her quietly, somehow sensing this was the best approach to use. 
 
The secretary used a polished fingernail to press the intercom button. “Mr. Mitchener?”
 
“Yes, Ms. Peterson?” Mitchener’s voice buzzed out of the speaker.
 
“Lois Lane is here to see you, sir… do you have a few moments?”
 
There was a perceptible pause. “Sure… send her in.”
 
“Thanks," Lois whispered to her accomplice. The woman nodded and quickly slipped away and out into the hallway. Taking a deep breath, Lois turned the doorknob and went into Mitchener’s office. 
 
The gleam of the afternoon sun’s rays shining through the partially shuttered windows caught on Mitchener’s fair hair as he looked up. There was no other light in the room except natural light. “Good afternoon, Ms. Lane. Or should I say, almost ‘Good evening.’” He gave her a cordial smile and gestured to the window. “I hope you don’t mind – I find that I think better without artificial light shining in my eyes.”
 
“It’s no bother.” The dim light actually seemed to soften the austere decor. “I'm sorry to bother you with so little notice.”
 
“I was quite pleased with the lovely article that you published the other day. I don’t mind a bit.” He gestured to the stacks of papers scattered around his desk. “I was just trying to finish a few things before I went home for the day. What did you need?”
 
Lois pulled her miniature recorder from her suit pocket and lifted it. At his assenting nod, she switched it on. “I was doing some research into a feature article – for the business section,” she began smoothly, using the same excuse she had used earlier on Leyden. “It’s common knowledge that your family has a long history here in Metropolis. Especially in business endeavors. But just how did you develop political aspirations?” As she talked, she walked slowly around the perimeter of the room, noting the various pictures and memorabilia he had placed on the walls and bookcases.
 
“I suppose you could say that it began in college,” he began in a polished baritone, eyes fixed on her slow circuit of the room. “Although to be perfectly honest, I really felt the desire to go into politics just a few years ago.”
 
“What exactly prompted the change?” Her fingers traced lightly along the edge of his college diploma. 
 
“Well, as you can see, my original degree was in business administration. But after a few years I began to see that all of my family’s wealth and influence could be put to better use.” She half-turned to study his face. He seemed to be speaking from his heart, but Lois’ trained ear could detect just the hint of a rehearsed speech in the ready-made and glib phrases. “After all, the city needs good men to help bring it to its fullest potential.”
 
“You mentioned the idea began in college? Tell me more about that,” she prompted, her eyes now resting on his framed membership certificate for Pi Kappa Alpha.
 
“I suppose it was there that I realized that I had a way with people. Whether I meant to or not, I always seemed to be the center of any activity. And I really enjoyed the attention, in my own callow way.” He moved, and joined her by the wall, pointing out a photo almost identical to the one she had seen on the chapter website. “These guys really trusted me, were interested in my ideas… And even after we got out of college – helping them out, in whatever way I could, really gave me a sense of purpose.”
 
“It’s always nice to help a friend in need, isn’t it?” She looked directly into his eyes as she went in for the kill. “I'm sure that Chase Robinson really appreciated it.”
 
If she had been Clark, she might have detected a change in his heartbeat, a tensing of his muscles… With her ordinary human senses, she still managed to notice a slight dilation of his pupils. “And I was happy to help him.”
 
“Even at a cost to your own business?” she inquired lightly.
 
His eyes narrowed at the direction this conversation was taking. He continued, his smooth voice revealing a hint of strain, “I wouldn't be much of a friend if I hadn’t.”
 
“But surely you must have worried about the allegations of scandal that Robinson and Sons had faced before you helped him out with all those contracts,” she pressed. “Going into business with a company that had a history of cutting corners couldn’t have been good for your fledgling company’s reputation.”
 
He moved away from her rather abruptly then, putting some distance between them as he perched on the edge of the big old-fashioned desk, behaving as if her accusation had absolutely no basis. “Maybe I was a little naïve, Ms. Lane,” he said, his voice cooling slightly in temperature.
 
Lois filled with determination, deciding it was time for the kid gloves to come off. “Naïve is an awfully mild term for what I suspect has happened here, Mr. Mitchener,” she accused boldly, thinking of the mangled bodies at Thorne Tower, and the anguish in Clark's face.  “I have it on very high authority that the substandard building materials used by Robinson and Sons may be responsible for much of the widespread destruction during and after the earthquake.”
 
“Responsible? Surely you're not suggesting that—”
 
“That’s exactly what I’m suggesting,” Lois interrupted, a bitter edge creeping into her voice.  The time for games was over. “L & V Construction, by working exclusively with Robinson and Sons, is at least partially responsible for what has happened to a number of prominent buildings in Metropolis. Are you going to step up and admit your part in it?”
 
In disgust, Lois turned away from the deputy mayor, who remained strangely silent behind her. She suddenly noticed the pilot’s license hanging on the wall – the one that Clark had seen tucked away in a desk drawer – and leaned in for a closer look. The name listed on the license: Philip V. Mitchener. There was the ‘V’ again…
 
Getting a hold of herself, she tried a different tactic. “Would you go to any length to help a friend?” she asked with forced nonchalance. There was still no response from the deputy mayor, but she sensed he was watching her closely, his body growing more tense.  Casually, she ran her finger along the edge of the license. “Even the ones who are in prison…?”
 
The air was now so still that she was sure even Clark wouldn’t have heard a thing in the silent office. So it was a complete and utter shock when she felt the cold steel of a gun’s muzzle poke into her shoulder blades from behind, and Mitchener’s hand clamp over her mouth. His voice dropped to a smooth drawl in her ear. “I think that’s enough questions, Ms. Lane.”

Next: Chapter 31: Voice

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mark_clark
Nov. 6th, 2006 12:54 am (UTC)
It's good to see that Lois has a great lead to follow and finally she and Clark can get to the bottom of things. Unfortunately, Clark is taking care of business as Superman, so Lois has to go it alone. I really enjoy seeing Lois all fired up about a story and this one is huge. It was good that Richard was able to go and pick up Jason but he wasn't to thrilled about it since Clark was doing his thing as Superman. I don't know if Richard will ever see that Clark will be there for both Lois and Jason even though his duties as Superman take him away from them from time to time.

I found it funny that Lois thought Clark was streaking by but it was just the ol' American flag flapping in the wind. That just shows where Lois' thoughts are and that she could use his help and quite possibly she misses Clark.

Lois was lucky to make it to the deputy mayor's office in time and receive some help from his secretary to see him. She really used her skills of getting what she wants and that was to see the deputy mayor. The secretary was able to get her to the DM before she left and Lois was grateful.

Now with Mitchener, Lois got down to business and went to work. I liked how she went about the interview and started things off like she did with Leyden. Of course, she was very Lois Lane about the interview especially studying the office as she talked to Mitchener. She really hit the nail on the head by mentioning L & V and it's link with Robinson and Sons with the recent building collapses. Plus she saw his pilot's license and the letter 'V' made it's appearance again. She was on to something but was stopped when Mitchener jabbed a gun in her back. Lois is in deep trouble and what makes matters worse, no Superman in sight. This really sets the next chapter up and I can't wait to see what happens next.
htbthomas
Nov. 6th, 2006 10:48 am (UTC)
I really enjoy seeing Lois all fired up about a story and this one is huge.

But how huge is it? ;) I had fun building this one up from suspicions... and the readers don't even know the whole story yet!

I don't know if Richard will ever see that Clark will be there for both Lois and Jason even though his duties as Superman take him away from them from time to time.

He may, he may not. But it's like the life of an emergency worker or a police officer. Other people's safety often takes precedence over that of your own family.

She really used her skills of getting what she wants and that was to see the deputy mayor.

That was fun - I wanted to show that Lois isn't a bad actress herself! You have to be to be a great investigator.

She was on to something but was stopped when Mitchener jabbed a gun in her back.

Oops. She got a little too close this time, huh...
ancarett
Nov. 6th, 2006 01:11 am (UTC)
Oh my gosh! I knew something like this was bound to happen as Lois & Clark dug deeper but, wow!, exciting!

I loved, as well, the angst that you evoked on Richard's part. He's going to be struggling for a while, isn't he? Such a good guy. Gosh!

Now, where the HECK is Superman?
htbthomas
Nov. 6th, 2006 11:00 am (UTC)
Yay! You thought it was exciting!

I'm looking forward to this next section a lot. I get to flex my action muscles, which are a bit out of practice. :)

Yeah, poor Richard. *hugs him again* Superman? Hmm...
bistyboo1974
Nov. 6th, 2006 01:15 am (UTC)
Meep! Even though I knew that ending was coming (thanks to previewing the outline the other day, when we had your writer's block chat), it still caused me to do a little bit of nail-biting. I hope Clark has an ear tuned in to City Hall...

Only a short distance from the wide marble steps in front of City Hall, Lois suddenly caught a flash of a red and blue in the corner of her eye. Clark…? She searched the sky above the buildings, but there was nothing there – only the whipping of Old Glory from a nearby flagpole. Her heart sank unexpectedly.

You know, I found myself getting excited when I read "a flash of red and blue," too...then rather disappointed to discover it was just a flag waving in the breeze. It's been too long since we've seen Clark! I miss him. *looks a bit sulky*

So, five to seven more chapters, huh? Would you hate me if I said I wished it could be more?? ;-)
htbthomas
Nov. 6th, 2006 11:05 am (UTC)
Well, I wasn't sure if you would find that part interesting or not - knowing the ending ahead of time... but I'm glad you thought so.

It's been too long since we've seen Clark! I miss him.

Two and a half chapters... I know... but unfortunately I have to honestly tell you that the storyline demands what it demands right now! He'll be back. :)

LOL - my beta (who wished for 30 originally) commented during this beta review that she felt 40 sounded like a nice round number... *winks at betty* Again, as I said, who knows how long it will truly be?
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elliania
Nov. 6th, 2006 02:14 am (UTC)
Oups... did Lois put herself in trouble??! lol
I love the way she always thinking about Clark, "how he would have noticed the heartbeat" and all the little thought Lois had about him! I mean, she is Lois Lane! She is not supposed to think unconsciously at her co-worker during an interview, doesn't she? It was cute!!
I loved Richard's reaction, too! When he noticed the hour (late) and all! And how awkward that scene was! So understanding, so natural!
Great chapter m'dear!
Just... two little mini mini negatives things: I miss Clark and Jason! lol! ;p
Thanks for this story!
See Yah!
htbthomas
Nov. 6th, 2006 11:07 am (UTC)
I love the way she always thinking about Clark, "how he would have noticed the heartbeat" and all the little thought Lois had about him! I mean, she is Lois Lane! She is not supposed to think unconsciously at her co-worker during an interview, doesn't she?

Well, you know, she's in love? That's all a person can think about sometimes, even a season reporter like Lois. :)

I miss Clark and Jason!

You're not alone...
sean_montgomery
Nov. 6th, 2006 04:16 am (UTC)
Whew! Lot's of B-plot to read in this one! But that's what makes it good!

I love the tension that you've created here between Lois and Richard. After that heartbreak of an admission, I can only imagine what's going through his head right now. Picking up Jason... just another reminder of what he thought was his. Poor guy. Caught in the middle of it all. *hugs him*

She searched the sky above the buildings, but there was nothing there – only the whipping of Old Glory from a nearby flagpole. Her heart sank unexpectedly.

Uh, mine did too! We've been slacking a little on the Clark action! : ) He needs some lovin' every now and then!

Oh my gasp! What an e.v.i.l cliffie you've got here! Worse than a teaser! I demand your muse get into shape once again and deliver on all levels you've provided! A great chapter once again, Barb!

Super!review will come soon!
htbthomas
Nov. 6th, 2006 11:13 am (UTC)
Lot's of B-plot to read in this one! But that's what makes it good!

Gee, thanks! Not everyone likes the B-plot as much as the relationship drama. I'm glad you liked it.

Picking up Jason... just another reminder of what he thought was his.

Exactly. Cruel but necessary, no? He would have agreed as well as she that it was the only course of action. And after he finds out what has happened to her?

We've been slacking a little on the Clark action! : )

This seems to be a familiar refrain! He's just a busy chap right now.

I demand your muse get into shape once again and deliver on all levels you've provided!

The Muse needs to do a few action-leg-lifts and suspence-arm-curls. She'll be with you shortly.
jenna_knight
Nov. 6th, 2006 06:22 am (UTC)
I agree that this is an EVIL cliffhanger...in a good way. I'm dying to know what happens next. Its a shame because I actually kind of liked Mitchener but from the looks of it he too is living somewhat of a double life. Can't wait for more.


And I just had to tell you that I am so glad that you wrote 30 chapters!!! Nice job as always.
htbthomas
Nov. 6th, 2006 08:39 pm (UTC)
Yeah, Mitchener's a crum-bum. But he's so well-liked! So of course, the intrepid Ms. Lane never did like him. She's like that, you know.

Anyway, I still can't actually believe I did it... 30 chapters...
taro_twist
Nov. 6th, 2006 07:33 am (UTC)
I see about 5-7 chapters left to the story by my general outline – but just how reliable that is…?

I hope it's very very unreliable ... lol. Although on the other hand, I would never want you to implode. :)

She really hated to do this to Richard after everything that he’d gone through today, but there was really no choice…She quashed a painful twinge of guilt, so she could get out her request.

I love this part, just because I think it shows Lois's character so well. When there's a story to catch, she's not going to let anything stop her, not even having to ask for awkward favors from her scorned ex-fiances. ^_^

Jimmy stood off to Richard’s right, looking for all the world as if he wanted to blend into the bookcases beside him.

LOL. Poor Jimmy.

Richard’s eyes blazed then, full of I-told-you-so’s. “Go chase that lead.”

Ouch ... ouch ouch ouch ... poor Clark, already looking unreliable. :(

Looking at the girl's flushed cheeks and sparkling eyes, Lois couldn't resist the sudden sense of fellow feeling that swept over her. Despite her impatience, Lois couldn’t help but sympathize, still feeling the sense of newness and rediscovery that falling in love could bring.

Aww ... Lois really is in love if she's empathizing with random secretaries. :)

And then I love the entire follow-up interview with Mitchener. You've really capture Lois's skills as a reporter there!

So it was a complete and utter shock when she felt the cold steel of a gun’s muzzle poke into her shoulder blades from behind

Agh! *wails* It can't end there! *bangs head into keyboard* You are the Cliffhanger Queen. I think this is your greatest one yet (greatest as in, most twisted and torturous one ;p).

Hmm ... I wonder whether Clark and Richard are going to have to work together to save Lois, though? *jumps up and down in anticipation*
htbthomas
Nov. 6th, 2006 08:45 pm (UTC)
It took me a while to come up with my thoughts, as I was mesmerized by your icon.

I would never want you to implode.

Aw. Thanks. :)

When there's a story to catch, she's not going to let anything stop her.

That's our Lois all right. Dontcha just love her?

poor Clark, already looking unreliable

Exactly, how much does THAT hurt? She knows he's right, too. But it doesn't change anything, really, does it?

You are the Cliffhanger Queen. I think this is your greatest one yet (greatest as in, most twisted and torturous one ;p).

Really? I mean I KNEW it would be evil, but the best one? *blush* I sure wish I could get an icon made for Cliffhanger Queen... I keep asking... You out there, Spank Mistress?
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anissa7118
Nov. 6th, 2006 08:32 am (UTC)
OMG!!! Oh sh*t!

You just wait til I get over to ff.net and review this, Missy!
htbthomas
Nov. 6th, 2006 08:46 pm (UTC)
*claps*

Oo! I can't wait! Are you going to do it soon? I will wait with baited breath until then!
(Anonymous)
Nov. 6th, 2006 09:36 am (UTC)
Ah, yeah... I was expecting Lois to get herself in trouble or something, when I read there weren't too many chapters left anymore. I like the way you did it... the 'nicest man you'll ever meet' turns out not to be very nice at all.. I hope the 'red and blue blur' Lois thought she saw earlier heard everything...

Great job, update soon.

Oh, and, eh.. I'm glad you've reached your 'nigh impossible' numer of chapters... I've enjoyed every single one of them!
maaike_fluffy
Nov. 6th, 2006 09:41 am (UTC)
Damn, forgot to log in (I'm at work, ssst, don't tell)

Previous most was by me... ;)
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therealmarajade
Nov. 6th, 2006 05:15 pm (UTC)
Great chapter! We had Lois being, well, Lois, and now Clark has to go save her! ;) Probably after being warned by an angry Richard that she was following a lead before she dissapeared!

Can't wait for the next! :)
htbthomas
Nov. 6th, 2006 08:56 pm (UTC)
Yeah, Lois is ALWAYS in need of saving, isn't she?

But don't underestimate Lois' chutzpah, either!
alamo_girl80
Nov. 6th, 2006 06:18 pm (UTC)
OH SNAP! A gun in Lois's back with Clarky sitting right there! Holy Cliffhangers, Batman!

I love that Lois is still taking the lead in the investigation, and you're moving the B-plot right along, even with all the problems between her and Clark.

Oops.. and Hubster calls right in the middle of my typing this. *hee!*

This is too cool, and I am WAY too hooked on this b-plot!
htbthomas
Nov. 6th, 2006 08:58 pm (UTC)
OH SNAP! A gun in Lois's back with Clarky sitting right there!

Clarky? What? Clark's nowhere around right now...? I be confused.

I am WAY too hooked on this b-plot!

I'm glad because b-plotiness abounds in the next few chapters.
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dreamers_dh
Nov. 6th, 2006 06:54 pm (UTC)
And I have thought your teaser was mean!
OMG!
A gun and Clark is nowhere to see? That's definitly not what I've expected!!!

Gratulations to your 30... *lol* I have written a fandom story two years ago and it was really amazing to come to Nr. 25. But that was the end of the story. 30 and a cliffhanger is very fantastic!

*hug*
htbthomas
Nov. 6th, 2006 09:01 pm (UTC)
Yeah, I kinda got that reaction about the cliffhanger from a bunch of people. :) I am still amazed I actually made it to 30...
mithah
Nov. 10th, 2006 03:52 am (UTC)
“After all, the city needs good men to help bring it to its fullest potential.”

What a line, especially coming from Mitchener! Hah. The city’s “good men” are people like Clark and Richard, not him, the slime.

But oh, this chapter, this chapter! THE QUEEN OF CLIFFHANGERS HAS STRUCK AGAIN (and you have the icon to prove it)! You can’t do this to me! A little piece of my soul is dying!!! (No, I’m not being overdramatic in the slightest, thank you very much!)

I was totally not expecting this chapter to do the 480-degree turnabout it did! Wow. I knew there was something “off” about Mitchener, but my God, not this! Wow. Just wow.

I need more, and soon, at that (don't make me e-slap you again)!

P.S. I loved the camaraderie Lois felt with the love-struck secretary--it’s so great (not to mention realistic) to see how wonderfully in love she is right now.
htbthomas
Nov. 10th, 2006 11:07 am (UTC)
Yes, I do</> have the icon to prove it... Heh. (Thanks again, bistyboo1974

I was totally not expecting this chapter to do the 480-degree turnabout it did! Wow. I knew there was something “off” about Mitchener, but my God, not this!

480 degrees? (lol - I'm actually trying to figure out what that would mean... the story spun one complete turn, and then went almost, but not quite the opposite direction? That's probably right!) Yes, my friends. This twist has been in the works almost from the beginning. You remember me mentioning the family reunion I went to at the beginning of August? betty and I exchanged a LONG series of emails via cellphone on this very point. And it ain't over, kiddies...

In-love Lois is fun to write. She hasn't lost her acerbic wit, but some of her edges are softening. :)


rogue_lane
Nov. 19th, 2006 10:30 pm (UTC)
Uh oh.

LOOOOOIS! NOOOOO!

Oh please have Clark save her!
htbthomas
Nov. 20th, 2006 01:32 am (UTC)
Yeah, that was a pretty bad cliffie, wasn't it? But as you saw, there's no immediate Superman swoopage. And you'll see why soon enough. :)
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rogue_lane
Nov. 20th, 2006 05:31 pm (UTC)
I read it and I think reviewed it, weird.
htbthomas
Nov. 20th, 2006 06:00 pm (UTC)
There's a comment about changing your username on Ch. 31, but no review. But as long as you already read it... I'm happy.

Don't forget that Ch. 32 went up yesterday!
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